Okay, I have completed my first read-thru of this script, and I must say: "OH MY GOSH! THAT WAS AWESOME!" G, my friend, you are brilliant. I'll try to tease out some critique later, but upon the first read I am very much impressed.
Valor hidden is character-driven.
"Beyond the Circles of the World you shall not persue those who refuse you." --Hurin to Morgoth upon Thangorodrim
"We are Rangers. We walk in the dark places no others will enter. We stand on the bridge, and no one may pass. We live for the One, we die for the One." -- Anla'shok creed
It would be nice to have this looked over, edited, and wraped up by the end of the year. Maybe that is asking too much but its been over four months since the script has been posted. It should not take half a year to read and post comments on it...should it?
Hopefully I will have the final story boards posted by year's end or shortly after. I was dragging my feet to see if any major changes were going to be made to the "G" version script, or if it would be used at all. I would post a poll on the possibilities to see where everyone stands but I'm afraid that I would only get 2 to 3 members to participate in that! hS, Chronicler, let me know if I'm way out of line for wanting to move on and get this confirmed and done. If not, and if I get no feed back, I will polish up the "G" version script by myself after Christmas and I will accept my script as the officially script. I will then post the final edit and the story boards for it in January. I'm not trying to flex and run everything, I just want FOTN to be completed and an official wrap. What say you?
Post by Kin of Turambar on Nov 10, 2008 12:47:21 GMT -5
I like it, a well done effort. Not enough wrong with it that I can tell to give any negatives, but one thing that stood out for me were the occasional typos. I don't see why they wouldn't be picked up on in a later version, though.
What's totally strange to me is your depiction of the creation of...well...everything, and the fall of Melkor. I pictured it exactly the same way. The only thing I was having trouble with is the music for it.
I have had the special fx planned in my mind for some time. Obviously, this would need to be done in my dept pretty much completely. I can also composite the beginning and end of the sequence into a live action pool of Galadriel, or non-live action, whichever one you guys have decided thus far.
I specialize in rendered light and movement. I can do this.
KoT, Sorry about the typos. It will be cleaned and polished up by year's end. Thank you for your comments. If you have any suggestions about how to make it stronger, let me know. Thanks again for posting.
Kundunis, I tried to come up with something appealing visually and not way beyond our (your) ability to achieve it. I am wide open to any other concepts of the creation sequence although I like my orb/sound wave depiction. It's about what is the most visually intriguing with the best chance of being pulled off. Post any other ideas that you may have on this. (maybe a sample?) Thanks for posting.
After going through the Prologue, I decided to go over the source material again (for the "ump-teen" time). I should start back looking over the script this week. I hope everyone is enjoying this winter season...you know that it is...(in his best singing voice) "The most wonderful time of the year".
Post by Glorfindel on Dec 23, 2008 16:29:25 GMT -5
Comic relief and comedy in a dramatic story, has been a concern in the pacing and "beat" of this script. A good friend, who read the script to the midway point, actually stated that she thought the story leaned more to an action comedy than an action story with dramatic elements (which I was going for, or at least a drama with action elements). I tried to put a few humorous scenes in so that it would not seem so gloomy. They also serve as relationship builders and a view into the semi care-free life in Valinor. I don't know if they are too much or over the top. Let me know what you think about those scenes and if they are worth keeping.